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July 2, 2015
North Texas Construction

Interstate 35 commuters and University of North Texas students will continue to have their patience tested with the construction projects, but construction is planned to end sooner than later.

Beginning in October of 2013 and scheduled to finish sometime mid HYPHEN HERE  2017 the construction on I-35 and around the UNT campus has added benefits such as adding lanes, but is also causing significant complications for the divers who currently use the interstate.

With the recent flooding around North Texas, driving and traffic have become a major importance and concern for locals. Road damages and significant closures have caused detour routes to at times come to a standstill, and traffic to be a nightmare for almost everyone in North Texas.
THIS WOULD BE A GOOD PLACE FOR A RELATED QUOTE, ILLUSTRATING AND HUMANIZING THE POINT

With all the flooding, most would believe that construction on I-35 and the UNT campus would be delayed or hit a standstill.

That is not the case according to Kimberly Sims, the public information manager for the 35 I-35, STED 35, PER AP STYLE project. Sims said that although the flooding has caused work to be limited in some areas, they have been able to focus on others of the project, while waiting for lake and flooding levels to go down.
THIS IS A GOOD PLACE FOR A QUOTE FORM SIMS SUPPORTING THE POINT IN THE PREVIOUS GRAF

From the Texas Department of Transportation website, WEBSITE HAS A CAPITAL W, PER AP STYLE whose representatives declined an interview, and also Sims, we DON’T USE FIRST–PERSON REFERENCES LIKE WE OUTSIDE OF QUOTES, PER AP STYLE. SAY, SIMS AND THE WEB SITE OF THE TEXAS DEPARTMENT OF TRANSPORTATION – WHOSE REPRESENTATIVES DECLINED TO BE INTERVIEW – SAID …  learned that the construction taking place is to add an additional lane each way, along with other construction in the area, such as the North Texas Boulevard bridge also going under a reconstruction project. 

Zane Reif, the UNT Senior Director of the university union, says he believes this project will help the facilities of North Texas live up to the expectations of the 37,000 students who go there.
THIS IS A GOOD PLACE FOR A QUOTE FROM REIF SAYING WHY HE BELIEVES THAT
Reif says his job and goal are to manage the project and to work with student requests.
AND HOW IS HE DOING THAT? THIS IS A GOOD PLACE FOR A QUOTE FROM REIS. SHOW ME HOW HE’S MANAGING/WORKING WITH STUDENTS; DON’T JUST TELL ME THAT HE IS

A current student, Robert McClay, is a finance major that has lived both on and off-campus during his time at UNT.

McClay said that the construction never factored into his decision to move onto campus, but said he would go to campus having to avoid I-35, especially during peak rush hours.
HOW ABOUT A QUOTE FROM MCCLAY HERE ELABORATING ON THAT?
McClay, who is planning to graduate in 2017, said “the project will not be beneficial to me because I won’t be here anymore. In the long run I can see it really helping other people and to help grow the school.”

Adam Gerson, a 2013 graduate, echoed McClay’s comments on the benefits of the project. Gerson said he thinks the benefits of the construction project will help to diffuse the bottleneck created by the increasing population in the area, and for everyone who gets off work around 3 p.m. having to drive home at the same time.
AGAIN, WE NEED A QUOTE FROM GERSON HERE. SHOW ME WHAT HE HAD TO SAY; DON’T JUST TELL ME HE SAID SOMETHING
The future benefits of the project are not without numerous consequences that everyone must face.

McClay said most of the issues he faced occurred when trying to leave and campus during the peak rush hours, causing him to avoid using I-35 altogether. START NEW PARAGRAPH HERE; ONLY ONE MAIN POINT OR ONE SUPPORTING POINT OR ONE QUOTE PER GRAF “Since most people live on or really close to campus it is not difficult to get to class, but it is really difficult to get off campus,” McClay said.

Gerson, who currently uses I-35 to get to work, said when he was attending UNT getting to and from class was not a real issue, but the construction posed a major issue when he attempted to go to his job at the time.
AGAIN, GERSON QUOTE HERE. SHOW ME; DON’T JUST TELL ME
Sims says that the I-35 project team is trying to combat these issues by only having closures between 9 p.m. and 6 a.m., which are lesser dense times on the Interstate. INTERSTATE IS LOWER CASE WHEN USED WITHOUT A SPECIFIC INTERSTATE NUMBER, PER AP STYLE

Sims said she strongly encourages people to follow up with the project on Facebook and to also sign up on the 35 I-35, STED 35, PER AP STYLE project website WEBSITE HAS A CAPITAL W, PER AP STYLE. PLUS, WHAT IS THE URL? to receive a newsletter. She believes this will help to inform the interstate travelers and alleviate some of the issues drivers face since they will have the most up to date information.
HOW ABOUT A QUOTE FROM SIMS ELABORATING ON THAT?
With significant construction taking place, the question of if it has affected UNT admissions was investigated. THIS IS AN EMPTY GRAF THAT REALLY SAYS NOTHING. DELETE IT AND JUST GET INTO WHAT YOU FOUND.

McClay and Gerson both said that they believed the construction had little if any impact on admissions, and noticed little change in their class size.
THIS IS A WEAK TEST OF EFFECTS ON STUDENT BODY SIZE. BETTER TO ASK UNT FOR DATA TO SEE IF THERE’S BEEN A CHANGE. IF WE ARE TO USE THIS; WE NEED SUPPORTING QUOTES TO FOLLOW THAT GRAF

Reif was unable to comment on admission numbers WHY? but said he takes requests from current students to have the facility live up to their expectations.

With the current enrollment seemingly unchanged and the project projected to finish within the next few years, McClay said UNT looks to be primed to thrive, especially economically, following completion of the project.
AGAIN, A QUOTE FROM MCCLAY HERE







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Sources:

Kimberly Sims
Public Information Manager at the 35 Project
817-773-5897

Adam Gerson
Peterbilt logistics engineer
UNT logistics graduate
817-832-8710

Robert McClay
Current Finance major at UNT
972-900-5230



Zane Reif
Senior Director of the UNT University Union
940-565-3811



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INSTRUCTOR COMMENTS: GREAT JOB OF ORGANIZING INFO HERE, BUT TWO BIG THINGS WOULD HELP YOU MOVE UP YOUR GRADE IN REWRITE: FIRST, MANY MORE QUOTES! LET’S ADD HUMAN-SOUNDING VOICES TO THE STORY. LET THE VOICES SHOW ME THEIR FRUSTRATION OR ANGST OR EXCITEMENT; DON’T JUST TELL ME THEIR FEELINGS. SECOND, WE COULD USE A NEUTRAL EXPERT LIKE A PROFESSOR IN TRANSPORTATION OR URBAN AFFAIRS TO PUT THIS IN PERSPECTIVE: HOW TYPICAL ARE THESE ISSUES? WHAT’S USUAL OR UNUSUAL HERE? WHAT ARE THE TYPICAL PROBLEMS AND CONCERNS AND BENEFITS? STILL, A VERY NICE FIRST JOB HERE.

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