Friday, February 24, 2017

RFTM Ch. 15: Speeches And Meetings

To cover a speech or meeting, planning and preparation are very important. Topics may be unfamiliar or complicated, so it's critical to take steps to prepare, including:

Learning the identities of key players and decision-makers;


Requesting agendas and other advance preparation materials;


Arriving early, getting good seats, pre-interviewing key players, arranging to talk to key players afterward;


Taking detailed notes!


Identifying key groups or people that may have counter views or who may be affected by any decisions being made/announced at the meeting/speech. Reporters can contact these people after the meeting/speech and either add their comments to the story or use them as the basis for a follow-up story.


Speech or meeting stories are often posted or published immediately after speeches or meetings take place. Reporters report on an event in detail, after identifying the central point or theme.


To organize such a story, lede with one or two of the most important/interesting/relevant/useful topics. Then, back into the rest of the details or issues.


(Like with a traditional news story, that means having to identify and highlight an end result/ultimate outcome/bottom line in your lede. You'll have to make judgments based on news values of what to lede with. You can't -- and shouldn't! -- lede with everything.)


To write an effective lede, write about the action, not the process. That is, the story not about a meeting or a speech, or even that a meeting or speech took place; it's about what happened at the meeting or what was said at the speech.


(Let's think about this in the context of writing a football game story. The story isn't about a game taking place; it's about who won or lost, and by how much, ect. We'd never write, MSU played Notre Dame in a football game Saturday night; we'd write, MSU beat Notre Dame 107-0 Saturday night. In the same way, we should never write, The East Lansing City Council met on Tuesday or Tom Izzo addressed the Happy Campers of America meeting Tuesday; we'd write, The East Lansing City Council voted to close MSU Tuesday or Tom Izzo proposed making himself King of the World at the Happy Campers of America meeting Tuesday. It's the action (winning 107-0, voting to close MSU, proposing royalty status) and not the process (a game was played, a meeting was held, a speech was spoken) that is the news.) 


Also, in the body of the story write happenings in the order of importance, and not necessarily in the order that things occurred. The most important item is in the lede; then, you detail the second most-important item; and so on.


In writing transitions between separate items within the same meeting or speech story, those subsections should be treated like mini-ledes, with focus on action and end result, and not just process and discussion.


(For example, you would focus on ultimate outcome in beginning a transitional section with something like, In other action, the city council also ordered the demolition of Spartan Stadium, and NOT something like, In other action, the city council discusses Spartan Stadium.)


In deciding what to write about and how to rank happenings, remember the audience! Keep audience interests in mind. Think about which issues are most interesting/important/relevant/useful TO THEM, and write your story accordingly.  


Help the audience clarify issues, understand events, and clarify jargon. Pleasing sources NEVER trumps helping the audience. You're there as a representative of the audience to identify and ferret back what they'd most want or need to know, and not necessarily what sources want told. People who do the former are journalists; ones who do the latter are publicists.


Also, do check your facts! Don't take what is said as gospel. Try to affirm what was said is actually true. Exaggerations and falsehoods are not unheard of from speech-makers and politicians, so fact-check what they're claiming. If they're caught in an untruth, do report what they said, and then counter it with what facts you discovered, including attribution. And see if you can ask the untruth-teller to explain the inconsistency.


Plus, get reactions to speeches and meetings from attendees and relevant outside parties.


(Who may be relevant? Think about who's affected by the decisions. If the East Lansing City Council votes to close MSU, those affected would include MSU officials and students and businesses that cater to students and even residents who have to live among students. Find such relevant parties, and add their voices to the mix.) 

JRN 200: More On Public Affairs Reporting

Posted here is a handout once given to JRN 200 instructors on how to define public affairs reporting. Instead of translating it for you, I thought it was direct enough to simply share with you. Here is the text:

The public affairs story assignment that culminates JRN 200 is meant to help students transition to JRN 300, where many of their stories will involve public affairs topics and issues.  Moreover, many of the JRN 300 students attending our session on “Thinking About Your Courses” said they would have liked more preparation for public affairs stories in JRN 200.

The draft below is meant to address this concern.  It first deals with the definition of “public affairs,” the kinds of local government institutions and processes that mostly make public affairs news, and the kinds of sources and stories student reporters can find.

Public Affairs:  A Definition
Many students are confused about the distinction between “public” and “private” when it comes to institutions and organizations they may be covering.  Some are even confused about what constitutes “government.”  So the definitions below are meant to help resolve these confusions.

1.      “Government” is made up of institutions and their operations that (a) use tax dollars and (b) derive their power from elections by citizens.  Government is the only  institution that has legal authority to collect taxes and, if necessary, to use coercion to enforce laws and rules.

2.     Public affairs is about the activity of government institutions, but is more broad than that: Public affairs involves any activities that in some way or other use tax dollars and/or impact governmental decisions.

3.     The implication of 2 above is that groups, businesses, etc., that try to influence government are also part of Public Affairs and therefore of interest for public affairs news coverage.

Local Government Institutions:
City/Township Governance:

1.      City Councils are elected by voters and have the power to enact “ordinances” that govern a number of aspects of civic life including law enforcement, fire protection, sanitation, etc.
2.     Mayor/Manager:  Mayors may be elected directly by voters or, in the case of smaller towns (e.g., East Lansing) elected from the city council.  An elected mayor has a full set of administrative officials to enforce laws.  In the case of smaller communities, a council hires a manager who serves at the pleasure of the council to do the same kind of administrative duties than an elected mayor would
3.     Courts:  These are district courts and circuit courts.  The district courts handle lesser crimes (dui, etc.,) while circuit courts handle major ones (murder, etc.)

School Districts: 

School districts are special governmental entities that perform a single task:  educating youth.  They have legal authority to raise tax revenue and expend tax dollars. 
1.    Boards of Education:  these are officials elected in the same way as city council members who have the power to make educational policy.
2      District Superintendent:  an official hired by the Board of Education to take on day-to-day administration functions.

Informal Business and Interest Groups:
1.      Although not governmental institutions, these groups often attempt to influence governmental policy.  Such groups include:
a.     Chambers of Commerce, Business Interest Groups, etc.
b.    Neighborhood Associations
c.     Unions, particularly public employee unions
d.    Issue Interest Groups such as Planned Parenthood, the ACLU, etc.
2.     Council appointed boards and commissions (e.g., recreation commission, etc.):  these groups make recommendations to councils on selected areas being considered.

Government Processes (relevant for news reporting) 

1.      Votes by councils/school boards on policy, finance, etc.
2.     Decisions by executive leaders/administration
3.     Citizen ballots on finance, etc.
4.     Trials in district and circuit courts

Public Affairs Story Sources

People Sources:
1.      Mayors/ administrators and their staffs.
2.     Elected council members/school board members
3.     Group/commission members
4.     Ordinary Citizens

Activity Sources:
1.      Official meetings of councils, commissions, school boards etc.
2.     Rallies, demonstrations, strikes, etc.
3.     Speeches, etc.
4.     Trials, sentencing, etc.

Document Sources:
1.      Web sites
2.     Official reports/studies
3.     Statistical data

Routine Public Affairs Stories
1.      Votes by councils and school boards and commissions
2.     Discussions by councils and school boards and commissions
3.     Interest group activity to influence 1 and 2 above
4.     Proposals by administrative officers
5.     Protests, strikes
6.     Court Activity

Reporting Skill Sets Needed
1.      How to cover and write stories involving some sort of meeting
2.     Interviewing 
3.     Accessing and integrating documents into stories
4.     Sourcing beyond government actors for stories
5.     Fairness and balance in reporting controversy

JRN 200: Your Friday 2/24 Homework

For this weekend, you will have TWO practice story assignments to do. The first one is slugged MEETING. For this one, use information provided in Reporting For The Media 11th Edition, Ch. 15, Ex. 5, p. 326. 

For this exercise, the city council is the Grand Ledge School Board. All relevant locations for this assignment are in the city of Grand Ledge.


Your deadline for MEETING will be no later than 9 a.m. Monday, to omars@msu.edu.


The second one is slugged POLICE. For this one, use information provided in Reporting For The Media 11th Edition, Ch. 18, Ex. 2, p. 389)


For this exercise, the incident is taking place in Okemos. The store is also located in Okemos. The responding authorities are from the Ingham County Sheriff's Department.


Your deadline for POLICE will be no later than 9 a.m. Tuesday, to omars@msu.edu. 


Now, the POLICE exercise is a bit different from previous practice stories, in that instead of being given a set of information, you are being given a mock police report form which to discern information, make sense of what happened and write your story.


For you to be able to figure things out, you need to know what military time is. The police report, like most police and fire reports, are written in military time, which differs somewhat from regular time.


In regular time, the daily clock is divided into two 12-hour clocks. For example, we have 12 hours of the morning (known as a.m.), and 12 hours of the afternoon (known as p.m.). The number indicates how many hours we are into the morning or afternoon. Like, 8 a.m. is eight hours into the morning. 2:30 p.m. is two hours, 30 minutes into the afternoon. Duh, right?


Now, let's compare that to military time. In military time, the daily clock is a single 24-hour clock, where the number indicates how many hours we are past midnight, and into the day.


For example, 0500 hours is equal to 5 a.m., since it's five hours into the day. 1430 hours is equal to 2:30 p.m., since 2:30 p.m. is 14 hours, 30 minutes after midnight.


The reports will list information in military time, but for the stories we must translate that info into regular time, since the latter is the time people in regular society use.


Also, please keep working on your second out-of-class story pitch, which is due by 10 a.m. Friday, March 3 to omars@msu.edu.


Plus, please read RFTM, Ch. 18 and 19 (p. 365-420) by Friday. Thanks!

Wednesday, February 22, 2017

JRN 200: Your Wednesday 2/22 Homework

Please start working on your second out-of-class story pitch. The parameters will be the same as the first; please refer to earlier posts about pitch parameters as needed. The second out-of-class story pitch will be due by 10 a.m. Friday, March 3 via email to omars@msu.edu. If you have any questions, please see me ASAP. And good luck!

Missing: Good Examples

... of this assignment. Great lede, solid story flow, liberal use of quotes, small grafs, frequent attribution, yadda yadda yadda.

Admittedly, this wasn't exactly what was turned in. The person was very close to having a perfect story, and I made the changes that I suggested in the graded version of this person's story. Still, do take a look at it, compare it to your own work, and think about how this person did the story, and how you could incorporate some of the concepts shown strongly here:
  
            Reports of missing persons may not be as criminal as the public thought.

            According to statistics by the U.S. Justice Department, Michigan had 57,152 women, men and children reported missing in the last year, but East Lansing police said no more than 100 are crime victims.

            “I’ve worked around missing persons for the past 10 years, and it’s rare finding someone after more than a year,” East Lansing City Police Sgt. Manual Cortez said. “We find a lot of people disappear because they’ve got troubles, want to leave them behind and start over again.”

            Last year, three-fourths of the missing persons in Michigan have been cases of runaway juveniles, according to the justice department.
 Among missing juveniles, Cortez said those missing are typically 11 to 17-years-old, girls exceeding boys 3 to 1.

            A 14-year-old girl, Sabrina, who has asked for her last name to be unidentified, said she ran away from her home in East Lansing because her stepfather was a drunk and hit her mom.

            “My parents got divorced,” Sabrina said. “I hated my stepfather.”

            Sabrina then convinced a man she met to take her to New York, she said.

She said after police caught her shoplifting and prostituting, she returned to East Lansing with her mother. 

“She’s dropped the jerk, so it’s better now, just the two of us,” Sabrina said.

             According to the justice department, there were 450,700 children nationwide who ran away from home and juvenile facilities last year and 127,100 whose parents would not allow them to return.

Cortez said more adult men than adult women disappear due to their troubles.


Jason Abare, 31, is a case of a missing person who ran away from his problems. Abare, who was ordered to pay alimony and child support for four children, said he left the state to avoid paying.

Abare, who is in construction, said he could find a job almost anywhere.

He said he moved around a lot, figuring that no one could catch him if he skipped town regularly.

“It was easy, real easy,” he said. “If I liked where I was I’d stay a couple months, even a year.”

Abare said he was caught after a drunk driving charge and returned to Michigan.

Among the total number of missing persons in Michigan, 9,000 have yet to be found, according to the justice department.

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I made similar fixes with this one, which used an alternative lede: an anecdotal lede, which was also a delayed lede, taking several grafs to get to the nut graf:


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 Divorced and ordered to pay child support for his four children, East Lansing resident Jason Abare said he decided to skip town to avoid his problems.

He said he could find jobs as a carpenter in construction “real easy” and that he figured no one could ever find him, so after divorcing his wife Anne Abare of nine years, he was supposed to pay alimony and $840 a month for child support, but he “wasn't going to give her a penny, not with the hell that woman put [him] through.”

“I got caught last month, charged with drunken driving and didn't have a driver's license anymore, so they checked my [finger]prints and found out who I really was and returned me here. Bad luck, that's what it was, just bad luck,” he said.

Upon his return to East Lansing, he was charged with nonsupport and put in the East Lansing County Jail.

According to the U.S. Justice Department, out of the 57,152 men, women and children who were reported missing last year in Michigan, 48,384 -- including Abare -- sooner or later reappeared, were found, or recovered. 

    Nearly 9,000 people in Michigan remain missing, and no more than a total of 100 of them, according to police, were true crime victims: people apparently kidnapped, robbed or murdered.

            Those 48,384 who reappeared were mostly people who ran away from their problems: deadbeat dads and moms, people running from debts, young men and women running away with lovers with whom they were deeply in love with.


           “We find a lot of people disappear because they've got troubles, want to leave them behind and start over again. A lot of people think about it, and some do more than think about it. Normally it's more men than women, except among juveniles,” East Lansing Police Department Sgt. Manuel Cortez said, who has worked around missing persons for the past 10 years.


           Some of the missing people each year are children who run away and others are very old people with Alzheimer’s disease who wander some distance away from their homes without noticing.


          Michigan State University Psychology Professor Alan Christopher said “most adults will stick around and handle their problems, but a lot of kids think it's easier to run away. Or they just don't think.”


           Three-fourths of the missing people last year were juveniles. Nearly 6,500 have not yet been found or located, according to the justice department.

“They see some place on television, and it looks good, so they try to go there,” Christopher said.

            Nationwide, 450,700 children and teenagers were reported to have fled their homes, juvenile facilities and other places they were supposed to be living last year, according to the justice department. 


          “Among juveniles, runaway girls outnumber boys 3-1. Kids, particularly those 11 to 17, flee in [large groups],” Cortez said.


           A teenage girl who is a East Lansing resident, who spoke on the condition her last name not be used, said she ran away when her parents got divorced.


            “I hated my stepfather. He's a jerk. He got drunk and hit my mom and expected us to wait on him like we were his slaves,” the girl said.


            “I met this guy who was moving to New York. He didn't want to take me, said I was too young, but I got him to change his mind,” she said. “I was there for two years, then got caught shoplifting and prostituting and the cops somehow they came up with my real name and my mom came and got me. She's dropped the jerk, so it's better now.”


        She now lives just with her mom, whom she said she could talk to now.


        The statistics also said another 127,100 children and teenagers were “thrown away,” meaning their parents, guardians or whoever cared for them would not let them come back.


         It becomes harder to find a missing person as time goes by.


         “It's rare finding someone after more than a year,” Cortez said.

Missing: Another Good Example

Upon hearing the term, “missing,” most people seem to connect it to kidnappings, robberies and murders, right?



In reality, a majority of missing individuals in Michigan choose to disappear on their own-leaving behind past conflicts and responsibilities in an attempt to start a new life for themselves. 



According to the U.S. Justice Department, out of the 57,152 men, women and children reported missing last year in Michigan, about 9,000 remain missing and were never found. 



Out of these roughly 9,000 individuals, police said that they believe less than 100 people account for victims of crimes; they said the number could be as low as 40 or 50. 



“We find a lot of people disappear because they’ve got troubles, want to leave them behind and start over again,” Sgt. Manuel Cortez from the East Lansing Police Department said. 



Cortez said that men account for more adult runaways than women do. 



Among such individuals is Jason Abare, a 31-year-old man from East Lansing. Abare said that he left the state in order to escape paying $840 every month to his ex-wife for alimony and child support for his four children.



“I wasn’t going to give her a penny, not with the hell that woman put me through,” Abare said. 



Abare said that as a carpenter, he was able to find a job wherever he traveled. He said that he “drifted” from job to job, and sometimes he would only stay a few weeks before leaving again.  



Abare said that he thought no one would ever find him if he frequently changed his location. 



“It was easy, real easy,” Abare said during a jailhouse interview. 


Abare said he is currently in the county jail for charges of nonsupport because the police discovered his real identity after they charged him for drunken driving and he failed to present a drivers license last month.

Missing: Different Kinds Of Lede/Nut Graf Combos

Most of you were direct and to the point in your ledes and then built upon that fact with a nut graf that helped answer questions created by the lede, like this:

In 2016 in Michigan alone, a total of 57,152 people were reported missing at one time or another, according to the U.S. Justice Department.


Among the people missing are crime victims, runaway adolescents, people with Alzheimer's disease, distant parents, people who have tried to run away from their debt and people who have run away with lovers.


And that was fine. The lede established the basic premise of the story in a simple and direct manner. And then the nut graf that helped answer questions created by the lede, like, "why do they disappear?"



Some of you tried to take things a step further by looking at the basic fact AND a telling subfact, like, "who is it that disappears?":



Troubled youths and runaways make up for three-fourths of the 57,152 missing people reported in Michigan last year, according to the U.S. Justice Department.


Out of Michigan's missing, 48,384 people were found with another 9,000 still missing. Police estimate that people missing involuntarily total no more than 100 in number.


Here, the nut graf expands on details by looking at how many of the 57,000 plus are still gone, and how many of those are gone against their will. It drills down into that 57,000-plus number a bit.


A few of you tried an anecdotal lede. This one had a lede that covered two grafs offering a personal anecdote symbolic of the larger problem, and then the third (nut) graf hits on that broader problem in a tone that sounds like a traditional straight lede:


Sabrina, a 14-year-old East Lansing resident and former runaway juvenile, is just one of the thousands of Michigan residents who have been rediscovered after earlier being reported as missing.


When Sabrina's parents divorced, she skipped town and moved to New York to get away from an abusive stepfather. Sabrina was discovered two years after she was reported missing after New York City police picked her up for shoplifting and prostitution, said Sabrina, who spoke on the condition her last name not be used.


According to the U.S. Justice Department, of the 57,152 men, women and children reported missing in Michigan last year, nearly 9,000 remain missing. Three-fourths of Michigan's total missing persons last year were runaway juveniles.


Here's another ambitious anecdotal lede:


Fourteen-year-old Sabrina just needed to escape.


Escape from her parents' divorce.


Escape from her stepfather, who would get drunk and hit her mom.


Just escape.


Sabrina, who spoke on the condition her last name not be used, is among the 42,864 juveniles in Michigan who went missing last year, according to the U.S. Justice Department.


Now, there's one way I think I could enhance these ledes, and that's with a telling quote from Sabrina that would help humanize the voice and perspective. In the case of an anecdotal lede, the best place for a telling quote is between the lede and nut graf, and not after the nut graf like in a more traditional approach.


Which lede/nut graf combos do you like, or hate? And why?

Missing: Watch Those Deadlines

As you may recall, this homework assignment was due at 9 a.m., meaning my email account had to have received your story before the clock struck 9.

And the last story was received at 9 a.m. and 10 seconds.


That's 10 seconds past deadline.


And I'm sorry to say, that's a time fatal that scores an automatic 0.0.

As I've said earlier, any assignment turned in after a deadline passes -- even if it's just a few seconds late -- automatically gets a zero. 


I'm not enforcing deadlines to be a Nazi. Rather, it's to reinforce the habit of never missing a deadline, and always making sure you're giving yourself enough wiggle room to make deadlines each and every time. Because journalism is a deadline business, we can never miss a deadline.


For example, if you're writing scripts for the 11 o'clock news, your scripts have to be in front of your anchors by 11 p.m., and not a minute later or even a few seconds later. The show starts at 11 o'clock, on the dot, no matter what. The anchor doesn't have the option of telling the audience, "Hey, just hold on a minute; we're still working on our scripts."


But the news director does have the option of firing you.


That's why we're trying to work on your deadline habit now; so you avoid a bigger and costlier missed deadline later.


You could always do extra credit here to make up for a time fatal. Getting a new job after you get fired with cause from your old one is a bit harder to do. 


Let's learn the lesson, and own deadlines from here on out.

Missing: Fatals Recap

Fatals included ...

PROBLEM: When we meant to say deadbeat dads, we said deadbeat dates. That misspelling creates a change in meaning, and a change in meaning is a fatal.

SOLUTION: Check your work word-by-word with your own eyes after we finish writing to make sure what we wrote is correct and what you intended to write. And don't simply rely on spell check; spell check wouldn't have helped here because our misspelling of exclaimed created a correctly-spelled explained, which was an unintended word. Spell check is a supplement to, but not a substitute for, checking our stories line-by-line, item-by-item, quote-by-quote and word-by-word.

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PROBLEM: We spelled the town's name as East Lasing when in fact it's East Lansing, with two N's.

SOLUTION: Same as above.


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Something to note: we're seeing the exact same mistakes reappear. Rarely is it a huge error; it's almost always something small that is a simple case of failing to properly proof a story.

Early on in this class, I talked about how doing all the little routine things in journalism -- like thoroughly checking your work to make sure what you wrote was what you intended to write, and that it was accurate as compared to your notes and the facts -- was something that you could never take for granted. It's not.

And it has nothing to do with talent, just vigilance. In the same way American can have the best army in the world, it doesn't really matter if the one night the army takes the night off, Canada decides to invade us.

Or if we're trying to stay in shape, and instead of running our miles every day we start to cut corners and slack here and there. Eventually, the pounds will start showing.


The fact is, you could be the world's best journalist, and you still have to do all the little and annoying things -- like checking routine facts -- if you want to stay ahead of making mistakes. Because when you're processing thousands of words a day in a professional environment and on deadline, a mistake is always waiting to catch you at a lax moment and bite your ass.

It's why The New York Times has the best journalists in the world, yet they still have a copy desk.

So there's no big thing to learn from the fatals, other than if we want to do things the right way, we have to do things the right way completely and each and every time.

This job isn't about writing. It's about getting it right. We have to start making sure we're following all the steps, every time. No more short cuts. No more assumptions.

Each and every one of you is capable of doing this, and doing it well. But we need to do all the things we're supposed to do for that to happen.


Missing: Did You ...

. . . use Sabrina Diaz's last name?

Why? Didn't you promise her that you would not?


If you didn't use her last name, did you tell readers WHY you weren't?


In our "Elements of Journalism" blog posts at the start of the semester, we talked about being transparent with readers. Part of that transparency includes telling readers why we aren't fully identifying somebody.


You really needed a disclaimer like . . .


. . . said Sabrina, who spoke on the condition that her last name not be used.


Now, at the same time we didn't want to create an incidental identification, by offering so much specific information that a reader could identify the person without much trouble. 


One of us did that by including Sabrina's exact home street address with her name. Armed with that information, anyone could find out exactly who she is. Let's be sure we don't reveal someone incidentally by giving out secondary information that's too specific in nature.


Also, let's not make up names for people. Generally, that's bad form, and could accidentally impugn someone who has nothing to do with a story. So, rather than make up a name, use a partial name, or no name at all. 

Now, considering we haven't done much with how to handle anonymous sources, did I grade you tough in this regard? No, not at all. But I hope you having to think about what to do, and your consideration of general journalistic values that we have discussed throughout the semester, helped you get an appreciation for this aspect of daily journalism.

Missing: What's New Is The News

News isn't that something happened or took place. It's what, exactly, happened or took place.

Let's consider this pretend lede from a football game story:


MSU played Notre Dame in a football game Saturday.


That lede doesn't work, right? That's because the news isn't that a game was played; it's what happened at the game, something like MSU beat Notre Dame 84-0 on Saturday.


In the same way, this not-pretend lede doesn't work, either:


The U.S. Department of Justice revealed the statistics of Michigan residents once reported as missing.


The news isn't that the justice department revealed statistics; the news is what those statistics were! So a better lede would have said something like, The U.S. Department of Justice found more than 57,000 Michigan residents were reported missing last year.



What you're missing in each case is ultimate outcome and end result: who won or lost the game, and by how much in the former; how many people are missing in the latter.


So if you're covering a city council meeting, for example, the news isn't that there was a meeting, or even that they discussed a specific issue at the meeting; it's what action took place regarding the issue at the meeting.


Let's be sure we're hooking our stories and our basic ledes on what happened, and not just that something happened.

Missing: Don't Forget The Obvious

What's missing from this lede?

There is more missing than you think in the state of Michigan, with 57,152 reported last year by the U.S. Department of Justice.


Here's the problem: what is missing? People? Cars? Cats? What?


Let's not overlook the obvious, and let's make sure that ledes have all the information that is critical to understanding the basic gist of the story.

Missing: How Do You Know ...

... so many people went missing last year? Did you count them yourself? Did you just make it up?

No. You got that from the U.S. Justice Department, right?


Well, how are your readers supposed to know that? Through attribution, of course.


So, offer the data and then attach, according to the U.S. Justice Department.


How do you know Jason Abare was found after a drunk driving arrest to have skipped out on child support? Were you riding shotgun with him and saw the whole thing go down?


Of course not. You know because he told you. So, if you were paraphrasing Abare's situation, you needed to say, Abare said. Pretty much everything not witnessed by you should have some sort of attribution. He said; she said; according to records; whatever.


Make sure you have properly attributed everything in your story. Basically, every paragraph after the lede and nut graf should have some sort of attribution affixed to it.


I know that's gonna look a bit weird, having graf after graf with so-and-so said this and this other dude said that and so on. But we do it as journalists to make sure that readers know exactly where we got our information. It promotes transparency and illustrates the factual basis for a story.

Missing: Second References

In first references, we often use the full title of an organization, in caps: the U.S. Justice Department, Michigan State University, etc.

But in subsequent references -- after we established the group in the first reference -- we can use a generic version in lower case or an appropriate common acronym: the justice department, the department, MSU, the university, etc.

Missing: Uh, Well ...

Some of you used quotes where the interview subject stammered. Like here:

"So, uh, I met this guy who was moving to New York. He didn't want to take me, said I was too young, but I, uh, got him to change his mind."


You may find the information to be useful, but the "uh's" are awkward. You have options on how to handle this.


First, you can translate the quotes into paraphrases, like this:


She said she met a man who was moving to New York City who didn't want to take her because she was too young, but she convinced him to change his mind.


Or, you could use quote fragments to work around the "um's" like this:


She said she "met this guy who was moving to New York. He didn't want to take me, said I was too young," but she "got him to change his mind."


Having a poorly-constructed quote doesn't mean you have to use a poorly-constructed quote. Our goal is to provide clarity to the reader, and the best way to do that is via a quote so the reader can see the subject's actual words.


But in lieu of that, making sure the information is clear and concise will suffice, as long as it's contextually correct and factually accurate and properly attributed.

Missing: Writing With (AP) Style

If someone's title precedes their name, then you capitalize: MSU Psychology Professor Alan Christopher

If someone's title follows their name, then it's lower-case: Alan Christopher, an MSU psychology professor


Also, titles in most cases should not be included after a first reference. You may start out by saying Professor Alan Christopher, but in subsequent references it's just Christopher, minus the professor and Alan.


Moving on, on first reference, is it Sergeant Manuel Cortez, or Sgt. Manuel Cortez?


It's Sgt. I know, because I looked in AP Style, under military titles.


On second reference, is it Sgt. Cortez, or just Cortez?


It's the latter. Under the same:


In subsequent references, do not continue using the title before a name. Use only the last name.



Also, some of you referred to Jason Abare as Jason in second references. Is that okay under AP style rules? No. This is what it says under names:


In general, use last names only on second reference.


Some of you were all over the board in whether to write a number as a digit or a word. Here's the most basic AP guideline, in your style book under numerals: In general "Spell out whole numbers below 10, use figures for 10 and above."


So two should be two, not 2. And 10 should be 10, not ten.


So then, is this correct to start a sentence, under AP Style rules?


Twenty-two . . . 


Actually, that IS correct number use. This is under the numerals heading:


Spell out a numeral at the beginning of a sentence.


Now, there are situations where you have a number that would be very awkward to spell out. Like with very large numbers, like 48,384. I would suggest not using such a number at the start of a sentence. Or start such a sentence with attribution so the number conflict doesn't matter (e.g., "According to the U.S. Justice Department, 48,384 . . . ).


Some of you faced a dilemma here with whether to change 3 to 1 to three to one, if used inside of a quote. Here's the general rule of thumb:


If the quote was spoken to you in an oral interview, then it's perfectly okay to change words to adhere to AP style, since it doesn't change what was spoken. If you are quoting a document, then you need to  replicate how the document actually readers, whether it conforms with AP Style or not.


In this instance, since you did not know if the quotes were spoken or written, I noted the AP style rule  but did not dock you for it.


Now, when the girl was referring to "my Mom," should "mom" be lower-case or upper-case?


It's lower-case. AP Style, under mom:


Uppercase only when the noun substitutes for a name as a term of address: Hi, Mom!


Did anyone think to look under "mom"?


Moving on, was it U.S. Justice Department or U.S. Justice Dept.? Did it depend on whether it was a first reference or a second reference? What does it say in AP Style under department?


Finally, is it Alzheimers disease or Alzheimer's disease? Did anybody look in AP Style under Alzheimer's disease?


I would strongly suggest you review AP Style headings under titles and numerals and names and department. And Alzheimer's disease wouldn't hurt.

Friday, February 17, 2017

JRN 200: Your Friday 2/17 Homework

Once again, you'll have some writing and some reading for the weekend. Here we go:

The writing assignment will be from Reporting For The Media Ch. 17, Ex. 3, P. 364. The slug is MISSING. Your deadline will be no later than 9 a.m. Monday to omars@msu.edu. Give yourselves 90 minutes to do the story.


For this assignment, your state is Michigan. Your city is East Lansing. The statistics are from the U.S. Department of Justice. The professor's school is Michigan State University. The name of Jason Abare's wife is spelled two different ways; the correct spelling is Anne. Using the spelling of Ann without the "e" will result in a fatal.


Also, you will have an ethical situation to handle in this story. You interview Sabrina Diaz, on the condition that you don't use her last name. How will you handle attribution in this situation? Review the prior text readings and blog posts, and come up with an ethical way to handle this situation that still addresses audience transparency.


Also, for your reading assignment please read Reporting For The Media Chapter 15 (p. 303-328) by 9 a.m. Wednesday.


And, per usual, please read today's latest blog posts reviewing our last writing exercise.


Any questions? Call me at 702-271-7983, email me at omars@msu.edu, or stop by and say hello by scheduling an appointment to see me at my office at CAS 360.

Out-Of-Class #1: A Strong Example ...

... from a past JRN 200 class of mine as to what a good out-of-class story should look like. In all fairness, this was someone's SECOND out-of-class story, so this was after they got out of the way their first one, which usually is the hardest one.

Why is the first one so hard? It's because most of you have nothing to compare this to. If you have never written a news story for a news organization, you don't know exactly what a finished news story should look like. You don't know how interviews are supposed to go. We have to learn all that by doing that. And we have to start somewhere.


So, don't fret too much about how you do, grade-wise, on the first out-of-class story.


Three reasons not to fret: first, the point of the first one is to have you do everything one needs to do to put together a news story, so you have a template to work from in future similar assignments.


Second, you will have a voluntary rewrite opportunity, where you will be asked to make fixes as recommended by me and do additional reporting, and rewrite your story. If you do so, your assignment grade will be the average between your original version and the rewrite.


Third, you will have the opportunity to do an optional fourth out-of-class story. If you do a fourth, then the three out-of-classers that will be used to help determine your final grade will be the three with the highest grades, with the lowest-graded one thrown out.


Now, back to the example. Please note how the story is structured, using the fundamentals mentioned in the previous blog post. Also note how this is a localization of a global issue -- a range of topic I didn't allow you in your first one -- but it relies entirely on first-hand reporting. Even for background on things happening in China, the reporter cites a neutral expert who he interviewed himself.


Please take a long look and try to get some ideas for how you can best report and write your first out-of-class storyThe author's name has been removed to protect the innocent:


JRN 200
10.24.12
 
Slug: China
An impending shift in political power halfway across the world could have a significant impact on MSU students, according to Yasumasa Komori, an expert in East Asian politics at MSU.
In early 2013, the Chinese Communist Party will introduce a new president — Xi Jinping — whose policies will likely add to the already significant influx of Chinese international students to MSU, Komori said.
Since 2007, the population of Chinese international students has grown by more than 400 percent to almost 3,500 in 2011, according to the MSU Office of International Students and Scholars.
These increases of Chinese students are common across major universities in the western world, Komori said, and are due to an increase in the population of China’s upper class amidst the nation’s swift economic growth.
“China’s economy has grown by very large percentages each year over the past few decades,” Komori said.
Most Chinese students who are undergraduates at MSU come from wealthy families, according to Li Kang, Director of the MSU Neighborhood Cultural Assistance Program. 
“The average income of a Chinese family is about $5,000 or $6,000 per year, and tuition and living expenses at MSU can cost 10 times that,” Li said. “Usually only the wealthy families can afford to send their children here.”
Li works within the integration process of Chinese students to the MSU community. He said that employers in China see huge value in students who have been educated in the western world and can speak English well.
“The American university system is very highly regarded in China,” Li said.
But even as an increasing number of Chinese students come to MSU, many have trouble adjusting to American culture, Li said.
“Often times Chinese parents don’t realize the difficulties that come with sending their children to the United States,” Li said. 
These difficulties can lead to resentment between American students and Chinese students, Li said, which will only increase as MSU’s Chinese student population grows.
“People don’t like what they don’t understand,” Li said. “It is so important that we find ways to bridge the gap between American and Chinese students.”
Komori said that American students sometimes feel threatened by Chinese students.
“Americans always hear about China as a growing economic superpower, so they view China as a threat,” Komori said.
However, China’s economic growth itself could be under threat, Komori said.
After nine years of stable growth under current president Hu Jintao, Xi is set to take over as Chinese citizens demand more transparency of their government all the time, Komori said.
“Xi knows that he is taking over a fragile superpower,” Komori said. “The rise of China’s middle class is dangerous to him because Chinese people are finding more and more about the how political processes work outside of China.”
Most of China’s federal decisions are made by a Communist Party panel behind closed doors, Komori said, and local elections are corrupt and often rigged.
As the middle class demands more input in China’s governance, it could negatively impact the nation’s economic growth through unrest, Komori said.
Higher, Adult and Lifelong Education graduate student Mei Jianyang said that life in China has been improving for most over the past decade, but few Chinese are interested in voting.
“Most people in China are so poor, they only care about having enough to eat,” Mei said. “China is not ready for free elections.”
However, she said that as Chinese people grow more educated, she thinks free elections are possible in a few decades.
“They will have to get rid of corruption among public officials,” Mei said. 
“Nobody trusts the few elections we do have. We know they’re rigged.”
Mei — who studied history at Nankai University in Tianjin, China — said that when she participated in elections for university officials, there were communist party members at the polls who effectively ordered voters who to vote for.
“Everyone knew how the election would turn out,” Mei said.
Mei said she came to MSU because of “new opportunities” that would not be available to her in China.
While she doesn’t expect Xi to be much different than Hu, Mei said she thinks that Chinese citizens will demand more transparency from him.
“Access to the internet has changed the way many Chinese people think about politics,” Mei said.
Word Count: 721
Sources:
Yasumasa Komori, James Madison College professor
Expert in East Asian Politics
komoriy@msu.edu

Li Kang, Director of the MSU Neighborhood Cultural Assistance Program
likang968@gmail.com

Mei Jianyang, Higher, Adult and Lifelong Education graduate student
meijiany@msu.edu

MSU Office of International Students and Scholars, 2011 Annual Report
http://oiss.isp.msu.edu/documents/statsreport/11pdfs/Asia.pdf