Like in this lede:
There are many fears that go 
through a bride's mind before their wedding. For Sara Howard, she never 
thought to worry about her husband's drive to the church.
Now,
 it's structurally fine. But the question I have is, how do you know she
 never thought to worry about her husband's drive to the church?
In
 the information you were given, you have no indication whether she 
wasn't worried, or that her fiancee was a shitty driver who had her 
constantly terrified with his lead foot.
Here, we went 
beyond the information you had, and made an assumption. We were being 
creative based on our guessing, not the facts. And we can't do that.
Now,
 as a journalist you would have been correct to find out if she ever 
though she'd have to worry about her fiancee's driving. And if she 
answered yes, then this lede would be perfect.
But we need to confirm the facts first. 
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