Monday, October 16, 2017

Out-of-Class #1: Example #5


October 13th, 2017

Housing

College Living



Calling all high school students, college students, and parents! What really is the best way to live the college life?



Location, space, noise level, safety, and convenience are a few of the many factors to consider when deciding whether dorm life or apartment life is best for you.



“What I enjoy most about living on-campus is the community of men and women that are involved in my life group. We are not divided up like the people living in different apartments because we are all living in the same area,” said Josh Abatie, a fourth-year dorm resident and senior at Michigan State University. GOOD LEDE-NUT GRAF-TELLING QUOTE SEQUENCE HERE



Abatie is involved in Cru, a Christian organization at MSU, and said he is living in the same dorm room as last year with one of his best friends.



“It’s a benefit living on-campus because it’s a fantastic ministry opportunity,” Abatie said. “It’s the best way you can love people well. The men that are in my life group I see in the cafeteria and I can hang out and spend time with them.” 



MSU offers a variety of meal plans according to Eat at State’s website and Abatie said he has had an unlimited meal plan all four years.



“Unlimited food in the cafeteria is great! Our dining halls are pretty well set up and provide for different food needs. They are pretty high quality,” Abatie said.



There are a few cons to living on-campus according to Abatie. He said he has recently been getting sick a lot because he is living in a small space with lots of people.



However, Abatie went on to say, “we have easy access to health care because health care is in the neighborhoods.”



According to Olin’s USE FULL NAME OF ORGANIZATION ON FIRST REFERENCE; website, the student health center at MSU, students enrolled in classes at MSU are allowed three free medical office visits each academic year. NOT SURE WHAT THAT HAS TO DO WITH LIVING ON- OR OFF-CAMPUS



Abatie also said parking has been an issue for him while living in the dorms because there is no parking nearby so he has to walk 20-30 minutes to his car.



Riya Malhotra, a junior and nutritional science major at MSU, lived in the dorms for two years and has recently switched to University Village Apartments. 



When asked about her experience living in the dorms she said, “it was fine, you get used to it after a while and you decorate it and it doesn’t seem so small and it becomes your home.”



Malhotra also commented on the convenience of living in the dorms and said it is harder to get to class now that she has moved into an apartment because some of her classes are 2 miles away.



THIS IS A GOOD SPOT FOR A QUOTE ABOUT GETTING TO CLASS



Malhotra said one downfall of the dorms was that garbage trucks would come really early in the morning and wake her and her roommate up.



Malhotra likes her new apartment and said, “you get your own kitchen which is a big benefit. It’s nice to have a living area where you and your roommate can talk and hang out without being crammed in the same room. You just have a lot more space in the apartments.”



Malhotra said she enjoys the apartments because she can cook healthier food, but that she also has an off-campus meal plan for when she is at class all day so she does not have to pack meals.



THIS IS A GOOD PLACE FOR A QUOTE ABOUT MEALS



Malhotra said she does not have a car with her at her apartment and it is sometimes difficult to get around without one but said, “eventually you get used to it.”



Safety and noise level are also a factor when deciding where to live. Officer Tim Schutter has been a police officer at MSU for 6 years and patrols campus around dorms and nearby apartments.



Schutter said campus is split into three team zones so each team of officers can spread out evenly.



“We see the dorms quieter throughout the night as opposed to some apartment complexes around campus,” Schutter said.



Schutter also said there are Resident Assistants on each level in the dorms and they normally handle the noise.



Schutter said regardless of where you live on-campus there will be police nearby patrolling and if you live somewhere where you want to see more officers around they are always accommodating to the public’s requests.











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Sources



·         Riya Malhotra: junior at MSU, nutritional science major, first year apartment owner

o   Email: malhot40@yahoo.com

o   Phone: 248-924-7624

·         Josh Abatie: 4th Year Dorm Resident, senior at MSU

o   Phone: 219-241-9221


·         Officer Tim Schutter of MSU Campus Police

o   Phone: 517-432-1602


·         Live On MSU Residence Education and Housing Services: Clerical Adviser

o   Email: liveon@msu.edu

o   Phone: 517-884-LIVE

o   *Did not use in story







ASSIGNMENT GRADE: (redacted)

INSTRUCTOR’S COMMENTS: GENERALLY GOOD WORK WITH STRUCTURE AND ATTRIBUTION, BUT WE SHOULD HAVE INCLUDED STORY DRIVERS – THE PEOPLE IN CHARGE OF THESE ISSUES, LIKE THE REHS OFFICIAL YOU MENTION AND AN APARTMENT COMPLEX MANAGER. AND WE NEEDED A NEUTRAL EXPERT. STILL, A GOOD START; THANKS!

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