Thursday, July 21, 2016

Out-of-Class #2: Another Example

7/18/16
SOUTH LYON HOTEL FIRE

The beloved South Lyon Hotel experienced a tragic fire early morning on Thursday, June 23rd        JUNE 23, NOT JUNE 23RD, PER AP STYLE that left the restaurant unable to provide it’s ITS’, NOT IT’S historic business.

Around 2 a.m. the fire department was called into action when the three remaining employees at the restaurant detected the fire and exited the building safely, according to the restaurant’s statement.

Corry Bala has been part owner of the Hotel HOTEL IS LOWER CASE WHEN NOT USED IN ITS FULL AND FORMAL TITLE, PER AP STYLE for roughly 15 years and is devastated by the recent fire, according to his interview, HE SAID, INSTEAD OF ACCORDING TO HIS INTERVIEW however he is hopeful for the future.

“It is our belief that we should be able to be up and running again within a year.  During this year, certainly, members of our community will be without us,” Bala, restaurant co-owner and general manager COMMA HERE said. “We've spent a good amount of time and effort to support various causes and charities and whatnot, which we will be unable to do during this time.  All I can say is that we will stay as involved in the community as we are able to, without actually functioning as the South Lyon Hotel.”

The Oakland County Sheriff’s Department told Bala that the fire was most likely caused by “some sort of electrical issue in the office,” Bala said. “Another possibility may involve a grease build-up on one of the roof-mounted units that vent the hot air from the kitchen.  Presently, our insurance company is investigating this possibility.”

The Hotel HOTEL IS LOWER CASE WHEN NOT USED IN ITS FULL AND FORMAL TITLE, PER AP STYLE is currently taking action in order to get back on track, according to the restaurants RESTAURANT’S, SINGULAR POSSESSIVE, INSTEAD OF RESTAURANTS, PLURAL online statement. They are dealing with insurance matters and holding off on fundraising efforts.

Ever since 1867 the Hotel HOTEL IS LOWER CASE WHEN NOT USED IN ITS FULL AND FORMAL TITLE, PER AP STYLE has provided it’s ITS’, INSTEAD OF IT’S customers with quality service and quality food. HOW DO YOU KNOW THIS? ATTRIBUTE! “Whenever I went to the Hotel HOTEL IS LOWER CASE WHEN NOT USED IN ITS FULL AND FORMAL TITLE, PER AP STYLE I knew my meal was going to be great,” Jack Corridor, South Lyon resident, said. “The employees there were so kind and there service was always on point.” 

The residents of South Lyon are distraught by this tragic event, for the Hotel HOTEL IS LOWER CASE WHEN NOT USED IN ITS FULL AND FORMAL TITLE, PER AP STYLE has been a staple in their community for over 100 years. “It’s really sad to me, that was my family’s go-to place for a night out together,” Gabbi O’Connell, South Lyon resident, said. “We have been going there for as long as I can remember and I really can’t believe this happened.”

As for the future, “The plans for rebuilding are still rather undecided.  Ultimately, these plans will be decided by the budget set forth by our insurance company,” Bala said.  “There was no fire in the downstairs level, therefore, as long as the first level is structurally sound, it is our hope that we will be able to build upon that.  START A NEW PARAGRAPH HERE; THIS IS A BIG ONE However, sometimes in these cases it is less expensive to actually start over with the entire building.  At this time, we are still in a holding pattern with the insurance company.  One way or another, we are ready to begin rebuilding as soon as we get the green light!”

I’M WONDERING IF THIS INFO AROUND HERE WOULD BE BETTER SERVED IN THE LEDE SEQUENCE, AS THE STORY NOW ISN’T THAT THERE WAS A FIRE, IT’S WHAT’S NEXT. THEN WE CAN BACK INTO THE BACKGROUND LIKE FIRE DETAILS AND THE HISTORY OF THE PLACE. CONSIDER REORGANIZING YOUR STORY FOR A REWRITE.

They are looking to reopen in 8 to 10 months if everything goes as planned, and in the mean time “are unable to operate at any capacity, including catering,” Bala said.

“Our community will be hurting for a long time,” Vince Candela, Hotel HOTEL IS LOWER CASE WHEN NOT USED IN ITS FULL AND FORMAL TITLE, PER AP STYLE employee, said. “The Hotel HOTEL IS LOWER CASE WHEN NOT USED IN ITS FULL AND FORMAL TITLE, PER AP STYLE was the city’s center and a great place to meet up with friends and have a good time. Many people would come in three to four times a week just to hangout with each other and now they can’t do that anymore.”

However the support from the community has been overwhelming. “The community has been tremendously supportive.  Not only have literally hundreds of people called my phone and those of my partners to offer kind words and offers of support, the community has rallied to help in several ways,” Bala said.  START NEW GRAF HERE; THIS IS A BIG ONE. IT’S OKAY TO HAVE TWO CONSECUTIVE QUOTE GRAFS FROM THE SAME PERSON AND LET EACH POINT FROM THE PERSON STAND OUT “For us, the most commendable is the effort to help find work for our staff. Within a few days, we had more job offers than actual staff members.  It was truly amazing to see so many people come together to help our staff.”

“When I heard of the fire my heart broke,” Amber Peters, South Lyon resident and former Hotel e HOTEL IS LOWER CASE WHEN NOT USED IN ITS FULL AND FORMAL TITLE, PER AP STYLE mployee, said. “Working there in high school was such an important part of my life, it was my first job, I’m hoping they can rebuild and reopen as soon as possible.”

The community has proven to be incredibly supportive. “Despite that we've asked that all fundraising efforts be put on hold until we can determine our exact course of action with the rebuild, there are multiple groups waiting to pull the trigger on fundraising efforts,” Bala said.  “We are truly lucky to be a part of such a fine community.”




STORY SOURCES:

Corry Bala:
·      Co-Owner/General Manager
·      248-437-6440
Amber Peters:
·      South Lyon Resident/Former South Lyon Hotel Employee
·      251 River Street, East Lansing MI, 48823
·      248-880-3333
·      peters.amber36@msu.edu
Vince Candela:
·      South Lyon Hotel Employee
·      248-670-2410
Gabbi O’connell:
·      South Lyon Resident
·      248-767-5434
Jack Corridor:
·      South Lyon Resident
·      248-912-5689
South Lyon Hotel Website:





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INSTRUCTOR COMMENTS: YOU DID A GOOD JOB WITH INTERVIEWS, BUT TWO WAYS I THINK WE CAN IMPROVE: FIRST, STORY ORGANIZATION. WE ARE USUALLY WISE TO START OUT WITH WHAT IT MEANS AND WHAT’S NEXT BEFORE BACKING INTO THE BACKGROUND. ONE IDEA: PRINT OUT YOUR STORY, CUT OUT EACH PARAGRAPH, AND THEN PLAY WITH THE ORDER THAT WAY. SECOND, WHERE IS OUR NEUTRAL EXPERT LIKE A LOCAL HISTORIAN OR AN URBAN PLANNING PROFESSOR WHO COULD TALK ABOUT THE SOCIETAL ROLE HISTORIC ANCHORS PLAY IN THE COMMUNITY?

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