MM #2: What You Did

In order of completion:

Kelsey B.: Living off-campus video and blog post and follow-up post and  tweets #livingonvsoff

We are writing these blog posts in a journalistic style, so let's avoid using first-person references.

Sami S.: for what do students pay video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #jrn$

We don't write in huge paragraphs in print, so let's not do the same in blog posts.

Brittanie C.: transitional housing video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #housingms

The vid title slide says, "Transitional Housing." Well, what about it? Like a lede, the news isn't the topic; it's what's going on with the topic, like "What Do Students Think About Transitional Housing?"




Hayley J.: study abroad video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #sabenefitsjrn200 

Chelsea E.: relationships video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #universityloving

Alyssa R.: fashion trends video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #jrn200leggings

Let's not forget a lede title slide or caption or narration.

Amber H.: campus safety video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #msuareyousafe

We only have one post; we needed two. What we were looking to do was have two posts that could be read independently but also were related; like one post on what authorities have to say about safety, and another on student reaction.

Plus, we need to be sure we're using full and proper first attributions (in the blog, the sergeant is the sergeant of what? MSU Police? And what is UNC? In the tweets, who is "he"? Don't assume people picked up the previous tweet; add the name in each tweet where the person is quoted).

Josh T.: free stuff video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #asmsufreeservices

These blog posts show that independent-but-complementary relationship we're aiming for: one post on what is offered and why, and another on student reaction. In the tweet stream, we need a first reference for Mozina.

Meagan B.: international students video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #internationaljrn200

We needed some video b-roll of the students walking to class, or taking notes, or otherwise doing daily sorts of activities so we could show the audience, and not just tell them what they have to say.

And each blog post essentially has the same lede. We want to evolve the content by building upon what was previously posted, and not just copy it. 

Megan E.: hockey video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #jrn200redwings

Again, the blog posts overlap instead of complement. We blended in both posts stuff about the jersey retirement and the player trade when it would have naturally cleaved along those lines: one post about the retirement; and the other about the trade.

Plus, this is still news, which means no unattributed opinions, which means leaving out the last tweet and vid caption. The medium is different, but if it's journalism the same rules apply as in print. We're observers; and not promoters or fans.

Jessica S.: study abroad video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #msustudyabroad

If we were trying to separate our tweet stream from the tweetsphere, this hash tag was too generic.

Plus, we need to make sure we adequately proof our video: sophomore is misspelled in one of the captions. Again, same rules as in print.

Akshita V.: investigation video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #msufedsjrn200 

With the hyperlinks, it would have been better instead of linking to superficial items like the general Department of Education and MSU Web sites if we linked to items that were specific to the investigation itself, such as other news articles. While borrowing from other media is generally discouraged in print, online it is valuable background.

Plus, the second post had kind of a fuzzy lede; we need to be clear and specific at the start as to what we're getting into, like we would be in a news story.

Emily J.: drink biz video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #vemmajrn

Cristi F.: Eat at State video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #msucafe

Again, the hash tag isn't unique enough to separate our content from the pack. Plus, if we're gonna talk to guys about working in the caf, we need B-roll showing them working in the caf. Show us; don't just tell us.

Amra D.: smartphones video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #spjrn

Very good hyperlinks in the lede post here, where we get detailed sources of information backing up the general conclusions being made in the post.

Krystyn C.: parking video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #parkingatmsujrn200

With the video, we don't need a second name attribution, since the viewer can already link the face to the first attribution. But we do need more in-interview B-roll, especially shots that show what is being spoken about: bicyclists, cars zipping by, buses, crowded parking lots, etc.

Aaron S.: no more hockey video and blog post and follow-up post and tweets #imhockeynomore

We need a stronger lede tweet; it's vague -- what is Munn? -- and could be confusing to someone just jumping onto the stream. Plus, with the posts there's a bit too much overlap; one post could have been solely on the renovations, and the other just on what that meant for IM hockey.

Now, what did you like? Or not so much? And why?