Wednesday, October 4, 2017

Robbery: Who, What, WHERE, When, Why


Did you need to cite the store's specific street address? Isn't that a basic and helpful identifier of WHERE this happened?

Wouldn't people wonder WHERE? Whether this was near their home? Or was the store they go to?


The lede probably won't have been a good place for that -- a first attribution simply as a Haslett convenience store, or a local O-Mart store would have been fine -- but an address with a subsequent attribution would have been helpful.


I'm just sayin'.

Robbery: Who, What, WHEN, Where, Why


One of us did a bang-up job on your story. Nice lede, good nut graf, good story flow.

One problem, though: nowhere in the story did you way WHEN anything happened. No dates, no times.


You could have an otherwise-great story, but if it entirely misses a key element -- like any of the five W's -- then it's not a great story, or even a good one. 


Others had a day, but not time. Still others had a time, but no day.


Don't overlook the obvious, folks!

Robbery: Did You Say ...


. . . it was a brand of Winston cigarettes? Or just cigarettes?

Was the particular brand necessary to the story? Or was it unimportant, other than to give the company a free ad?


Specific brands should be cited if important to the story; like if a Ford Focus crashed into a Hummer. Knowing a teeny-car brand hit a monster-tank brand makes a story more understandable, right?


But in this case, the robber could have asked for Winstons or Camels or whatever. It really wouldn't have made any difference.


It's one thing if you were writing some sort of detailed narrative, where small observations mater in setting mood and color. This wasn't one of those cases. You were just writing a plain ol' daily news story.


Unless it was inside of a quote, I would have left out the brand name.

Robbery: Writing With (AP) Style


Is it 11:00 p.m. or 11 p.m. or 11 pm or 11 o'clock?

It's 11 p.m., or maybe 11 o'clock. Under times:


Use figures except for noon and midnight. Use a colon to separate hours from minutes: 11 a.m., 1 p.m., 3:30 p.m. . . . The construction 4 o'clock is acceptable, but time listings with a.m. or p.m. are preferred.


In the wake of this exercise, please be sure to review the AP Style listings for times.


Now, does the general AP Style number rule of spelling out numbers under 10 and using numerals for 10 and over count when talking about the time of day??


Actually, no. Here is what it says in AP Style under times:


Use figures except for noon and midnight.


So 9 a.m. is 9 a.m., not nine a.m.


But the AP style rule of numbers under 10 are spelled out/numbers 10 and over are given in digits still applies elsewhere. For example, the robber was shot three times -- with three spelled out -- and not 3 times, with 3 as a digit. 

Also, is an address 2752 Michigan Ave or 2752 Michigan Ave. or 2752 Michigan Avenue?


From AP Style, under addresses:


Use the abbreviations Ave., Blvd. and St. only with a numbered address: 1600 Pennsylvania Ave. Spell them out and capitalize when part of a formal street name without a number: Pennsylvania Avenue. Lowercase and spell out when used alone or with more than one street name: Massachusetts and Pennsylvania avenues.


Spell out and capitalize First through Ninth when used as street names; use figures with two letters for 10th and above: 7 Fifth Ave., 100 21st St. So in this case, it's 2752 Michigan Ave.


And if you referred to the intersection of 29th Street and Melrose Avenue, that would be the correct reference, not just 29th and Melrose.


Now, let's look at money. Is it $25, with the dollar symbol ahead of the amount or 25 dollars, with dollars spelled out?


It's the former, and not the latter. This is what I pulled from the AP Stylebook, under dollarsUse figures and the $ sign in all except casual references or amounts without a figure.



Now, let's talk about titles.


If someone's title precedes their name, then you capitalize: Ingham County District Attorney Ramone Hernandez


If someone's title follows their name, then it's lower-case: Ramone Hernandez, Ingham County district attorney


Also, titles in most cases should not be included after a first reference. You may start out by saying District Attorney Ramone Hernandez, but in subsequent references it's just Hernandez.

Tuesday, October 3, 2017

Out-Of-Class #1: Your Deadline ...


... if I have approved your topic (and I probably did; GREAT range of topics that you can self-report. If you haven't yet gotten a reply, you will soon), will be no later than 9 a.m. Friday, Oct. 13 to omars@msu.edu. 
That gives you more than one week to work on it, as the syllabus notes you should usually have a one-week turn-around time.

Please don't wait to start on this; lining up sources and finding sources willing to be interviewed can take a lot more time than you'd expect.

If you wait, you may miss opportunities to gain key interviews, and end up turning in a subpar product.

Please note the assignment parameters, as listed in your syllabus:

  • The topic must be pre-approved by me, via tip sheet 
  • The story must be at least 700 words long
  • You need to note the word count at the end of the story
  • The story should include at least three sources who you have personally interviewed. Three is the bare minimum, but I expect to see many more than that. 
  • ALL your sources should have been personally interviewed; do not borrow content from news articles and Web sites. If you see someone cited online whose comments you want to use, Google the source and contact him or her directly.
  • You should try to incorporate at least one neutral expert
  • On a separate page, attach a source sheet where you list by name, title, phone number and email address each interview source you communicated with. I will be randomly spot-checking sources to check your accuracy and make sure you spoke to whom you claim to have spoken.
  • Also, keep in mind you will have the opportunity to do an optional rewrite of one of your stories, after the graded version is returned to you.   To earn credit for a rewrite, you must do additional reporting and rewriting, as suggested by me. Then, your initial grade and rewrite grade are averaged, and that average becomes your final assignment grade.
  • In structuring your story, use the lessons we've learned and been working on with our practice stories. That's the point of doing those; so we can have a well-organzied story utilizing interview material with strong ledes and nut grads and such.
You will also have ONE rewrite opportunity for ONE of your three out-of-class stories.

I strongly suggest you take advantage of rewrite opportunities; first, because out-of-class stories are such a big part of your final grade, any increase in grade is bound to make a difference. Second, the more you write and report, the better you get.

So, you get an opportunity for a higher grade, and I get the reassurance that you're taking more opportunities to refine your craft.

Good luck, everybody! 

Out-Of-Class #1: How To Write It


I recently was asked how we were supposed to write the out-of-class story; in a structure similar to the practice stories?

The answer was -- and is -- absolutely!


The reason we've done all these practice stories was to initiate you into a journalistic style or writing and information organization. Essentially, the out-of-classers are like your midterms and finals, in that that's where I get to evaluate in a more definitive way what you've learned.


So, let's make sure our out-of-class stories have ...


>>> No fatals! Like I've said a million times, journalism isn't about writing; it's about getting it right. So, our first and highest obligation is to make sure we've double-checked not only our work to make sure what we wrote is accurate to our notes, but also double-check our sources against other sources, to make sure what we were told by our original source is verifiably true.


There's a rule of thumb in journalism that goes, if your mother says she loves you, check it out. What that means is, if your mom says she loves you, don't simply take her word for it. Seek evidence that supports what she claims.


For example, if your mother says she loves you and you're trying to verify it, you can go by documented evidence (such as, birthday cards she went you every year, in which she wrote how much she loves you) and historical evidence (like, she never missed any of your sports games in high school, and always rooted loudly for you) and source/witness evidence (like friends and relatives, who say she never shuts up about how much she loves you).


Like Ronald Reagan used to say about dealing with the Russians: trust, but verify. That's what journalists have always done. We don't just write down what people say; we check it out. It's not that we think they're lying; we're just making sure what they're saying is fully accurate and contextual, with nothing misinterpreted or left out.


>>> Strong ledes, whether it be a summary lede getting to the main point of the story, or an alternative or anecdotal lede that offers a humanizing example of the greater issue, before backing into strong nut grafs hammering home the main point.


>>> Thought given to the Peanut Barrel rule in crafting those ledes, so that readers can quickly get what is most interesting/relevant/useful about your story. 


>>> A focus on what is most newsworthy, in sequential order, rather than simply listing things as they unfolded.


>>> Lots of quotes, introducing human voices into your stories.


>>> Interviews you did yourself! Not stuff you found online, or something CNN reported. All info -- even background info -- should be from first-hand sources you spoke with.


This is the difference between writing a term paper and writing a news story. With a term paper, you start with a conclusion, and then find evidence from second-hand sources like Wikipedia or whatever to support your main point.


But in journalism, we start out with a theory, and then fact-test our starting point by doing first-hand interviews and seeing what we can discover that confirms or rebuts our starting assumptions, or even takes us in a whole new (and newsworthier) direction. We follow the facts, not necessarily the original expectation.


Only then -- after we have done our first-hand interviewing -- do we determine what the main point of our story is, and we write it based on what we discovered and the facts we gathered and verified, rather than what we started with. 



>>> Solid attribution, so that the audience knows exactly where you're getting your information from, and leveraging the expertise of your sources in a transparent way. For attributing statements, just use said.


>>> Short paragraphs, with only one main point OR one supporting idea OR one supporting quote per graf. Not all three; not even two of three. Just one per graf. This is done so that main ideas and supporting points can stand out (like in an outline), and for ease and clarity of reading and editing.


When in doubt, hit the "return" key and start a new graf. There's no such thing as too small a graf in journalism,but there are grafs that are too big. 


If you have any questions, please see me sooner rather than later. Most good solutions involve doing more reporting, and that isn't much of a doable solution at 11 p.m. the night before it is due.

And please be careful, thorough and timely. Each out-of-class story equals about 10 percent of your final semester grade, or roughly equal to all the practice stories we've done sofar, put together.

Again, these are our midterms and finals, so treat these out-of-classers with the same level of importance.

Monday, October 2, 2017

Out-of-Class #1: Your topics

You should have your story pitches approved by now. I approved a good range of topics that include:

  • RAs and the problems they face at MSU
  • "Building your brand" by getting internships while at MSU
  • Comparing off-campus life to on-campus life
  • Libraries in the age of the Internet
  • Students struggling with weight issues at MSU (2 people working on this angle!)
  • Students working to pay for school
  • The "rape trail" legend at MSU
  • Liberal arts majors looking for tech jobs
  • Preventing sexual assault at MSU
  • How Title IX changes can affect MSU
  • Bikers vs. walkers at MSU
  • How cell phone use affects everyday students
  • Pollution in the Red Cedar River
  • Booze at MSU
  • How international students view free speech here
Overall, a good bunch.. Here were some issues with the pitches:

  • A lack of neutral experts. Very few pitches listed any. Our final stories will need neutral experts quoted within. Please review the earlier blog posts regarding neutral experts or see me ASAP if you have any questions or concerns.
  • Citing other news media and journalists. As journalists, we need to do our own work and not crib info from other news articles and reporters. That means instead of citing a CNN article on students where they talk to a sociologist, we contact the sociologist directly ourselves and interview him or her. For term papers citing news articles is okay but for journalism we do our own first-hand reporting.
  • Source choices that can be better. We should NOT be interviewing teachers we have or have had. That is a conflict of interest, especially if you have them now and they control your grade. You should NOT interview people with whom you have a class. You should interview people who have a relevant stake in what is happening; for example, you wouldn't interview a journalism teacher on a story about the drug culture among millennials. You'd seek a drug expert or a doctor or a sociologist who actually works on such issues regularly.
  • Source range is too narrow. We need people in charge of the issue at hand AND people who are affected by the issue at hand AND people who are expert at the issue at hand. All three, not just one of three, Too many had just one of those subject groups.
These aren't unusual issues for students to have on their first pitches. But we need to be sure to get them fixed for the stories we actually turn in, and for future pitches.