Everyone did at least fine on this assignment, some by sticking to basic ledes, and others by trying alternative ledes.
Here's some basic ones:
... and ...
Next up, let's look at some alternate ledes. Off we go:
Arrested? Prepare for a mug shot, fingerprints, and a $25 service charge.
It's basic and to-the-point, yet still a bit creative in terms of the question lede. It makes it sound a bit more conversational. So did this one:
In an attempt to cure East Lansing's financial troubles, committing a crime now costs offenders more than the humiliation of an arrest.
These next two one looked at the topic from a similarly-practical angle; what you may see as a result of the news:
Lions, elephants and giraffes may soon be found roaming a lot closer to home, as ecologists and biologists want to transplant African wildlife to the Great Plains of North America.
... and ...
While driving across the Great Plains of North America, how would you feel about looking out the car window and seeing giraffes, lions and elephants?
Here, someone took a secondary angle and highlighted it; the angle being, what would the move mean to those affected?
This next one had a bit of fun with word play:
A wild idea proposed for a transplant of African wildlife to the Great Plains of North America by Michigan State University scientists is stirring up controversy across the country.
These next two went straight to context:
What could have been the happiest day of Scott Forsythe's life turned fatal after he was killed in a car accident driving 100 mph on the way to his own wedding.
... and ...
Just 15 minutes before 22-year-old Scott Forsythe was scheduled to say "I do," a decision to save a dog's life took his own.
... and ...
This next one very nicely went to end result and ultimate outcome:
A 6-month-old girl was left unharmed in her parents’ sport-utility vehicle after it was carjacked by an armed robber at the Quik Shoppe convenience store Wednesday.
I liked these next two, too, that were centered on context:
This next one bridged the basic facts AND context:
Now, which ones do you like, and why? Which ones don't you like, and how come?
Here's some basic ones:
The East Lansing
Police Department will charge arrested persons $25 for mug shots and fingerprints to offset
expenses, city officials announced today.
Scott
Forsythe, 22, was killed this morning in a car accident on Kirkmann Road, just 15 minutes before he was to be married.
... and ...
... and ...
A group of Michigan State
scientists have come up with a possible plan to transplant African wildlife in
danger of extinction to the Great Plains of North America.
... and ...
A six-month-old girl was left unharmed in her
parents’ sport-utility vehicle after it was carjacked by an armed robber at the Quik Shoppe
convenience store Wednesday.
Next up, let's look at some alternate ledes. Off we go:
Arrested? Prepare for a mug shot, fingerprints, and a $25 service charge.
It's basic and to-the-point, yet still a bit creative in terms of the question lede. It makes it sound a bit more conversational. So did this one:
In an attempt to cure East Lansing's financial troubles, committing a crime now costs offenders more than the humiliation of an arrest.
These next two one looked at the topic from a similarly-practical angle; what you may see as a result of the news:
Lions, elephants and giraffes may soon be found roaming a lot closer to home, as ecologists and biologists want to transplant African wildlife to the Great Plains of North America.
... and ...
While driving across the Great Plains of North America, how would you feel about looking out the car window and seeing giraffes, lions and elephants?
Here, someone took a secondary angle and highlighted it; the angle being, what would the move mean to those affected?
A new idea from Michigan State
University scientists has Jim Smithson, a rancher in North Dakota, worried that
his cows may be slaughtered by a possible new threat: lions.
This next one had a bit of fun with word play:
A wild idea proposed for a transplant of African wildlife to the Great Plains of North America by Michigan State University scientists is stirring up controversy across the country.
These next two went straight to context:
What could have been the happiest day of Scott Forsythe's life turned fatal after he was killed in a car accident driving 100 mph on the way to his own wedding.
... and ...
Just 15 minutes before 22-year-old Scott Forsythe was scheduled to say "I do," a decision to save a dog's life took his own.
... and ...
Scott
Forsythe was to be wed at 9 a.m.
At 8:45 a.m., half
a mile from the church where his bride-to-be waited at the altar, Forsythe
crashed into two trees and a fence at 100 mph.
Now, instead of a honeymoon,
his bride will attend a funeral.
This next one very nicely went to end result and ultimate outcome:
A 6-month-old girl was left unharmed in her parents’ sport-utility vehicle after it was carjacked by an armed robber at the Quik Shoppe convenience store Wednesday.
I liked these next two, too, that were centered on context:
Could you imagine a routine gas station visit
turning into a search for your missing 6-month old baby? For Ethel Perakiss on Wednesday afternoon, this was a reality.
...and ...
...and ...
When Ethel Perakiss’ car pulled up to the Quik Shoppe
convenience store Wednesday afternoon, her six-month-old daughter was in the
back seat.
When the car pulled away from the
store, her baby was still in the back, but a stranger with stolen money and a
handgun was at the wheel.
This next one bridged the basic facts AND context:
A Michigan
Avenue Quick Shoppe robber fled the scene Wednesday with money, a stolen car,
and to his surprise, a baby.
Now, which ones do you like, and why? Which ones don't you like, and how come?
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