Last night, the East Lansing Zoning
Board voted unanimously against resident Olivida Saleeby’s request to bury her husband in the backyard of the
couple’s home.
It's
a great lede, except we never say he's dead. Again, a reader doesn't
know where you're going with this. The lede creates momentary confusion
-- bury him? What, is that some weird thing he's into? It makes the reader guess why he's being buried.
So,
let's anticipate and prevent the confusion by providing the obvious (to
us, but not necessarily to the reader) detail: she requested to bury
her dead husband.
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