This was a lede that went in that direction:
The Grand Ledge School Board discussed several issues at its meeting last night.
The
problem here is that the news isn't that the school board addressed
items; it's what the items were that were addressed. From this lede, you
don't know if they gave out ribbons to old ladies or declared war on
Russia. It's too vague. Those ledes sound like this imaginary football game story lede:
The MSU football team played a game Saturday night.
And that's a lede we'd never write, right? This next lede was better in that regard:
The MSU football team played a game Saturday night.
And that's a lede we'd never write, right? This next lede was better in that regard:
The Grand Ledge School Board discussed its budget, evolution vs. creationism in textbooks and summer school at its meeting last night.
You do
identify what the issues were, but it still falls short of ultimate
outcome and end result; that being what actions they took regarding
these issues: for example, with the school board it's that they approved a new budget, considered teaching creationism, rejected canceling summer school.
That lede sounds like this modified game lede:
The MSU football team played Notre Dame Saturday night.
And that lede still doesn't go far enough toward ultimate outcome and end result.
This modified football lede does:
The MSU football team beat Notre Dame 63-0 Saturday night.
So, now let's apply that same fixation on end result on this school board lede:
The Grand Ledge School Board approved a new budget and voted to keep evolution-based textbooks and summer school at its meeting last night.
That lede sounds like this modified game lede:
The MSU football team played Notre Dame Saturday night.
And that lede still doesn't go far enough toward ultimate outcome and end result.
This modified football lede does:
The MSU football team beat Notre Dame 63-0 Saturday night.
So, now let's apply that same fixation on end result on this school board lede:
The Grand Ledge School Board approved a new budget and voted to keep evolution-based textbooks and summer school at its meeting last night.
Much better, right? You now know precisely how things ended.
But it wasn't necessary that you include every element in your lede. A big
part of journalism is deciding what is most newsworthy, and ranking that
news accordingly (or even excluding things if you feel the
newsworthiness was limited or simply not there).
This lede zeroed in on a single topic:
The
Grand Ledge School Board put evolution ahead of creationism in opting
to keep current textbooks at this week's board meeting.
And
that's fine. I'm not saying the book issue was necessarily the lede
item; I think valid arguments could be made for any of the items being
the most interesting, relevant and/or useful. Readers don't need us to
summarize a whole meeting; they could probably Google an agenda
themselves. What they need journalists for is to make sense of the news
and tell them what matters most.
So don't be afraid to make decisions, based on the evidence and what may impact or interest readers the most.
One
lede took ultimate outcome beyond the meeting. Remember that while
summer school would be kept this year, the board wants to study the
matter? Well, this was one
of your ledes:
The
Grand Ledge School Board County Commission promised to consider the
future of summer school after extending such classes for one year at
yesterday's board meeting.
This
is what I call a forward-looking lede; one that goes beyond what
happened at an event, and is centered in what that means going forward,
or what action is next as a result. When we talk about ultimate outcome,
the outcome isn't that the board talked about it; it's that the board
will talk about it some more. That's the latest and newest news.
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