7/18/16
MSU Alumni
A Michigan State degree can help immensely after graduating,
and some MSU alumni are proving it.
Michigan State is one of the most prestigious universities
in, not only Michigan, but the whole United States. Students who graduate
usually leave with a bigger brain and a lifetime of memories that they will
cherish for the rest of their lives. They will also leave with a degree that
looks impressive on any resume.
HOW CAN WE QUANTIFY
THAT CLAIM? WHAT ARE THE STATS FOR MSU ALUMS GETTING JOBS VERSUS OTHER SCHOOLS
OR THE NATIONAL AVERAGE? IS IT HIGHER OR LOWER? WHAT DO HEADHUNTERS AND CAREER
ADVISERS SAY? DON’T JUST MAKE THE CLAIM; SUBSTANTIATE IT
Take it from 23-year-old Scott Oldham, who graduated from
Michigan State three years ago with a degree in mechanical engineering. The choice for him to study there was easy,
he said. He decided after his first
visit to the school, and seeing how extraordinary the campus was, he knew he
belonged there.
Since graduating, he didn’t have any trouble finding work and
now works for Solar City, which is an energy provider. He says he has no regrets about choosing MSU,
and said, “They definitely made me into what I am today. HOW SO? DETAIL AND EXPLAIN. DON’T JUST TELL ME IT MADE ME; SHOW ME HOW
IT MADE ME Things are going great.”
Oldham isn’t the only person who has had no problems finding
work out of college. 21-year-old Jason
Schick graduated a year early last year. After graduation he also was able to
find work right away, and now he works full time at a physical therapy office
as a rehab technician.
“Yeah the job is going great,” says Schick, “and I plan on
going to med school too but I’m not sure where yet.” Clearly, things are going
good for him too and his degree and 4.0 GPA have to take most of the blame for
that.
SAME THING: WHAT WAS
IT, SPECIFICALLY, ABOUT MSU THAT HE THINKS GAVE HIM AN EDGE? DON’T JUST TELL ME
THE GENERALITY; SHOW ME THE SPECIFICS AS WELL
Even though graduating students may not always find work in
their field right out of college, there are still other things that can be done
with a degree.
Adam Javery, who graduated two years ago with degree in
communications, was not able to find a job right away.
After a year out of school he made the choice to join the
United States Airforce. AIR FORCE IS TWO WORDS PER ITS FULL AND
FORMAL TITLE, PER AP STYLE However, with his bachelor’s degree, he was able
to move up the ranks fast and now sits as a 2nd Lieutenant as he
trains in San Antonio, Texas.
HOW DID HIS BACHELOR’;
DEGREE AND SPECIFICALLY ONE FROM MSU HELP HIM COMPARED TO OTHERS? DON’T JUST
TELL ME; SHOW ME
When Javery finishes his training he will pilot flying drones
for the military, meaning he will be controlling a flying vehicle while he
controls it on the ground below.
With how successful his early military career has been,
Javery plans to stay in the service for at least six more years. “So the normal
time served in the military is usually four years, but I really like where it’s
going so I’m not sure how long I’m going to stay in yet.”
Getting a degree is what matters most when pursuing a career
after college, ACCORDING TO WHOM? WHAT
IS THE DATA FOR THAT? but don’t let that take away the importance of the
experiences that Michigan State brings its students every year.
The reason Javery initially wanted to attend MSU was because
he wanted to join the marching band.
Even though he didn’t make it, he said that he still loved seeing them
perform around campus and at football games.
He also was a part of the intermural soccer league and the
long board club. “I met so many people
in that club. We would have a whole squad and would just roll through campus
all day on our long boards.”
AND HOW DID THOSE
EXPERIENCES HELP HIM GET A JOB? WE NEED TO TIE IT BACK IN IF THERE IS A TIE,
AND IF THERE ISN’T WE NEED TO CUT THIS OUT
Michigan State is full of clubs like these that help students
from all over campus come together and meet people with the same interests as
them. Scott Oldham was also a part of
intermural soccer as well and he said that after joining the team he found out
that a lot of them played soccer almost every day. “It was good that I found
something to do, otherwise I would have just sat in my dorm all the time.”
Jason Schick says, like most people, the best times were when
he and his friends would go to the sporting events, mainly football. “Everyone there just has a good time, well,
unless we’re losing of course.”
AGAIN, WHY DOES ANY OF
THIS MATTER TO THE POINT OF MSU GIVING PEOPLE A A CAREER EDGE? HAVE IT MAKE
SENSE FOR ME
As one of the greatest universities in the land, Michigan
State has clearly not only been giving a great experience while they attend,
but it has also been preparing its students to be successful after college.
A
degree from one of the top schools in the country and a lifetime of memories
are just part of what MSU brings its students.
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INSTRUCTOR COMMENTS:
THE BIGGEST PROBLEM WE HAVE WITH THIS STORY IS THAT IT IS TOO ONE-SIDED. ALL WE
HAVE ARE QUOTES FROM PEOPLE WHO WENT TO SCHOOL HERE: NO SCHOOL OFFICIALS LIKE
CAREER COUNSELORS, NO PEOPLE WHO HIRED MSU GRADS TO SEE IF THEY ACTUALLY USED
THE PERSON’S MSU EXPERIENCE AS A REASON TO HIRE THEM; NO NEUTRAL EXPERT LIKE A
BUSINESS PROF WHO SPECIALIZES IN EMPLOYMENT ISSUES TO COMMENT ON WHAT FACTORS
DO MATTER WHEN GETTING HIRED AND HOW WHERE YOU WENT TO SCHOOL RANKS, AND NO
DATA TESTING YOUR PREMISE THAT MSU GIVES PEOPLE AN EDGE. WHAT IS THE DATA FOR
MSUERS GETTING JOBS, AND HOW SOON THEY GET THEM, AND HOW IT COMPARES TO
NATIONAL AVERAGES? PLUS, WE DON’T GET ENOUGH INTO DETAILS; WE HAVE SOMEONE SAY
MSU GAVE THEM AN EDGE, BUT THEN WE DON’T SAY WHAT THAT EDGE WAS, OR HOW IT
PLAYED ITSELF OUT. DON’T JUST TELL ME SOMETHING IS SO; SHOW ME THE DETAILS
PROVING IT.
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