In most ledes, we want to aim for getting to the main point; that is,
the end result and ultimate outcome. How did things end up?
This lede doesn't quite get there:
Til' death do us part is still too soon for
Olivida Saleeby, who requested that the East Lansing Zoning Board allow her to
bury her husband of 62 years in their backyard.
In
it, we know what the issue was, but we don't know how it ended up. The
news isn't that the board was deciding the issue; it's how they decided
it.
This lede goes the extra, necessary step:
“Rest
in peace” remains easier said than done for Olivida Saleeby after the East
Lansing Zoning Board denied
her request to bury her husband in the backyard of their home.
Again, the news isn't that the burial was requested; it's that it was denied.
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